"The most beautiful things are deep within ourselves."
Idea Webs / Brainstorming
We met up as a group, to share ideas, after we brainstormed individually. This picture shows all of our potential spoken word ideas and how we incorporated some ideas to our main topic, beauty. We felt that the word beauty is associated with looks rather than what we have to offer in the inside. We wanted our message to be "Find beauty in everything".
First Draft
Below is our first draft of our poem. All these ideas were inspired by our idea web.
First Draft
Below is our first draft of our poem. All these ideas were inspired by our idea web.
Feedback Sheets + Ms. Britt's
Reflection for First Draft
We thought our poem rhymed too much to the point where it was starting to sound like a Dr. Suess book. We wanted to incorporate elements that didn't rhyme because we felt that it would balance it out. We wanted to delve more on the topics that we were highlighting, that we consider beautiful.
Second Draft
Link to Second Draft
P.O.A. Feedback + Ms. Britt's
P.O.A. stands for "piece of advice". We read our spoken word poem out loud to our class two times. The first time we let them listen to it and let it sink in. The second time they were looking for a something that needs work in a claim, evidence and reason structure. Most of our critique was to practice talking in unison.
Reflection for Second Draft
Zamira: The second draft was challenging to write because we didn't want to rhyme as much. Stretching out the sentences and describing what we mean was hard to do in detail. They wanted us to use figurative language like similes and metaphors. It was hard to work as a group and create it.
Vincent: I think what was hard about it was talking in unison and knowing when to add in when someone was talking.
Paolo: Something challenging was staying focused and being organized. I am disappointed in myself because I let my group down because I didn't do much work.
Sarina: We got critique from Ms. Britt that really helped with figuring out the order of our poem to make it flow. We decided that our poem is a life and we are describing the different events in this life that are beautiful.
Reflection for First Draft
We thought our poem rhymed too much to the point where it was starting to sound like a Dr. Suess book. We wanted to incorporate elements that didn't rhyme because we felt that it would balance it out. We wanted to delve more on the topics that we were highlighting, that we consider beautiful.
Second Draft
Link to Second Draft
P.O.A. Feedback + Ms. Britt's
P.O.A. stands for "piece of advice". We read our spoken word poem out loud to our class two times. The first time we let them listen to it and let it sink in. The second time they were looking for a something that needs work in a claim, evidence and reason structure. Most of our critique was to practice talking in unison.
Reflection for Second Draft
Zamira: The second draft was challenging to write because we didn't want to rhyme as much. Stretching out the sentences and describing what we mean was hard to do in detail. They wanted us to use figurative language like similes and metaphors. It was hard to work as a group and create it.
Vincent: I think what was hard about it was talking in unison and knowing when to add in when someone was talking.
Paolo: Something challenging was staying focused and being organized. I am disappointed in myself because I let my group down because I didn't do much work.
Sarina: We got critique from Ms. Britt that really helped with figuring out the order of our poem to make it flow. We decided that our poem is a life and we are describing the different events in this life that are beautiful.
Final Draft
Link to Final Draft
Our final draft tells a story of a life.
The first stanza ends where we say "Legacy is beauty". This declares our message from the very beginning of our poem and tells our audience that we are trying to pass on the message of "beauty is in everything in life" to our next generation.
The next three are the cycle of life.
The last stanza restates our message and wraps up the piece.
Link to Final Draft
Our final draft tells a story of a life.
The first stanza ends where we say "Legacy is beauty". This declares our message from the very beginning of our poem and tells our audience that we are trying to pass on the message of "beauty is in everything in life" to our next generation.
The next three are the cycle of life.
- Birth - "Life is beauty"
- Teen/Adult - "Resilience is beauty"
- Old Age - "Acceptance is beauty"
The last stanza restates our message and wraps up the piece.